Excellent pacing through-out, I especially enjoyed the little details that make it worth watching again (the notes written to the "cernal", etc.)
I did feel the section immediately after the flashback was a little weak compared to the rest of the animation though. Still very impressed!
Subtitles may have been a good option to emphasize the awesome spelling and grammar that Mr. Chimaera is (in)famous for.
Yeahhh, I admittedly got pretty sloppy around the flashback. It was one of those situations, not unlike when working on Zone of the Awesome or Dick Neck, where I had been working on it for so long, that I was steadily becoming more and more sick of it. In those areas, it was definitely rushed. (As well as the Zombie scene and to an extent, the credits.)
Ahh, yeah, and I forgot to learn how to make subtitles! I'll have to work on that in the future :P
Thanks a whole bunch, James! Sorry I couldn't implement the Dad whacking Lil' Stalvern with his eyes like a billy club like we talked about in class. lol
But what about their OLD logo, with the valve in the eye? :D
There's a lot of theories going around in these reviews...most think it's either Nick or Gordon Freeman! But I did some research...it might be Kelly Bailey who does the music for HL and such. I don't know though. Glad u liked it though!
Haw, but timing?
Nice little joke, but I think you made it a little too long.
*spoiler* I would have let the audience in on the joke but not the characters. For example, when the guy thinks to himself "they should have put in an escalator," quickly pull the camera back to reveal that he IS on an escalator, maybe having the guy up top preform the patented "face palm" technique to finish it off.
Entertaining, not perfect.
Nice collection, not sure if they were all really Noir, but still entertaining stories.
To the first animation, a nice twist at the end, your story is good. Your style is very inconsistent though, sketchy and unfinished in some areas, and extremely exact and geometrical in others. It looks to me like you ran out of time and had to rush it out. Maybe refine it and resubmit it on its own later?
To the second animation, not really Noir at all... Very little story, its more of a "hey look at this robot tittie lady kill people." I like your style of art, perhaps work with a writer in the future? Music choice was not appropriate, in my opinion. Perhaps you were trying to be ironic with the choice, but I felt it didn't help your animation at all.
To the third animation, you were my favorite. :) As others mentioned, its not exactly Noir, more a gangster theme. Despite that, it was a well written story with a nice style of art and while the animation was a little limited (shooting tommy guns one handed looked awkward) it got the meaning across. The ending was just about perfect, gotta applaud that.
to the fourth animation, still not quite Noir, but not bad at all. Honestly, change the clothing a bit, trench coats and evening gowns for instance, it would have helped a lot. Very short, which isn't always a bad thing. At the end I assume the gunshot was her, but it wasn't quite clear. Seems a little unlikely that she could have shot with that big gun so close. I'm just nitpicking though.
Overall, an interesting collection, I see a lot of potential! Keep on it.
THAT EXPLAAAAAINS.......... everything.
This is an awesome idea. Expect my submission!
Excellent Animation Skills, but...
Your animation was very nice and smooth for the most part, there were some simple anatomy inconsistancies that bothered me, but its a small thing. Your use of pictures as backgrounds worked rather well, good job!
My complaint is the story of this animation. From what I saw here the characters are just a bunch of pretencious assholes. All we saw was that they were misfits in class and didn't get along with the other students. They also bullied smaller students, going so far as to tie them up and leave them in a dangerous situation in the storm. I can't relate to the dream of being an artistic soul when they spend their free time abusing others. Maybe if you had shown that they had a hard life, maybe having to work a job or do hard chores at home as well as working hard at school.
Overall, your animation skills are good, but your storytelling needs work. Keep it up!
Lmao, even pretentious assholes have dreams. You don't need a hand in the salvation army bucket to have an aspiration. I made the girls jerks to more accurately reflect my own childhood, add some depth to their personalities, and to make the overall cast less saccharine and likable.
It's a great contrast. :3
Kinda lame animation and the overall humor was a little lacking. But you did get a chuckle out of me at the end. "Prick", har, cause ya know, a penis. Sorry.
You have a nice style here, but its too abstract for my tastes. I didn't see much connection between the chapter names and the clip that followed. Cheezy sound effects (such as the splat when the guy fell, the gun sounds from the eye, the pointless shriek at the end) just made your animation seem cheap and unprofessional. Give it another go with more effort and I think you could do some really great stuff!
it was rushed
i had to finish it before monday
Very nice! Seems familiar.
Might you have been inspired by the webcomic "MSPaint Adventures"? You've got a similar flavor to your story. Lookin forward to part 2!
Interesting! Could use some polish.
An interesting start to a promising story! I did notice quite a few errors here and there (when he scratches his head his had becomes only an outline, the fish's tail seems to be disonnected from the body, etc.). There was also a subtitle or something near the end that didn't have a translation. One last thing, you might want to solidify your art a bit more for part 2, it seemed like there were three different styles in this movie. I look forward to the continuation!
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